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Glistening feathers,
Blacker than the darkest night
A specter weaving through the clouds
Majestic is his flight

So beautiful,
Piercing eyes reach into my soul
From the netherworld he will come
When I am no longer whole

An enigma,
Spawned from the magick of old
In a lingering mist he waits
Cast in velvet shadows so cold

Silent wind,
Roses fall upon my grave
Talons clasp my fading spirit
A fallen love will he save

Destiny,
Shrieks echo across a leaden sky
Life descends to the arms of death
Scarlet tears begin to fly

Tragedy,
Memories my heart cannot sever
Broken dreams whisper —
real love is forever



— Arthur Crow © 2012
One of the first poems I ever wrote, many Moons ago...



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:iconsodomizedcupcakes:
This is a pretty cool poem, magical with some awesome visuals. However, I do think that in certain parts, the rhyme feels too forced and breaks the rhythm. While the rhyming was kept up well throughout the whole thing, there's a few stanzas which loose specific ideas and end up just becoming random descriptions with no real direction. Other than that, I really enjoyed this. :)
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ArthurCrow Jan 27, 2013  Professional Writer
It was my first attempt at poetry, there's bound to be flaws. Thank you for reading.
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:iconsodomizedcupcakes:
Oh well then, sorry. It was Amazing! I loved it so much! =D
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ArthurCrow Jan 27, 2013  Professional Writer
LOL
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:iconroadkillkitten:
It's very well done, my friend. I love the imagery of the crow and death, rebirth, and the soul's flight into the otherworlds. Your imagery paints this well, and the word choice moves the reader along smoothly.
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ArthurCrow Jan 27, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank you so much :)
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:iconroadkillkitten:
Of course, my pleasure.
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DannyMechanist Dec 26, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
arthur arthur arthur .... when are you going to cease to amaze me....
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infinitexxx Dec 26, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
the two lines were perfection. and i really just like the way this poem flows.
fantastic work
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