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Soul dark her eyes bleed obsidian, like a fever of liquid-shadows,
seeking her lover damned…
And a myriad of talons will seed the sky — a primeval calling
of necromancy and lust untamed
Upon her breath, I whispered softly in winged-caress:
"cast thy nightscapes unto the ache of gossamer streams"
So she closed her eyes and her demon lover hungered long..
— Forever the Crow — shimmering in her darkest dreams

— Arthur Crow © 2012
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Art, your opening line may be the best. Soul dark eyes bleeding obsidian. This is truly a keen image. Fever of liquid shadows. The whole poem bears the mark of an attentive writer, and a poet of unique skill. I rarely read lines like this in postmodernist literature here. You could set the example, if enough writers read this.
A myriad of talons, primeval necromancy lust untamed. Thrilling metaphors. The quotation in italics was great. You show good imagination. I hope that you will continue writing in this is outstanding style and worthy of notice. I find almost nothing to complain here.
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This is absolutely beautiful.
ArthurCrow Feb 6, 2014  Professional Writer
Thank you
Clouded-Rachel May 26, 2013  Student Writer
This is gorgeous. Your imagery is absolutely stunning. Well done.
ArthurCrow May 28, 2013  Professional Writer
Hey thanks so much, that's a wonderful response
Clouded-Rachel May 28, 2013  Student Writer
You're welcome!
imaginative-lioness Apr 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I have featured this piece in my journal: [link]
ArthurCrow May 14, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank you so much, really appreciate it
Michel-le-fou Mar 31, 2013  Professional Writer
Art, i will criticise after a moment. I liked the opening of this poem.
I have a list of favorite words, and you used four of them in this. (shadow, whisper, gossamer, shimmer) and I think I'm going to add obsidian.

We have a very similar taste in words; the only difference is that you have the ability to coherently incorporate them into your writing (consciously, unconsciously, however you do it XD) I'm totes jelly. It's beautiful :)
ArthurCrow Dec 23, 2012  Professional Writer
How cool is it to have all those favorite words in common :) That's good to know.
Honestly with me, there are certain words I can't stay away from.. I try not to use them too much in my writing (so as not to become too repetitive), but often can't help my self lol.
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