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Soul dark her eyes bleed obsidian, like a fever of liquid-shadows,
seeking her lover damned…
And a myriad of talons will seed the sky — a primeval calling
of necromancy and lust untamed
Upon her breath, I whispered softly in winged-caress:
"cast thy nightscapes unto the ache of gossamer streams"
So she closed her eyes and her demon lover hungered long..
— Forever the Crow — shimmering in her darkest dreams

— Arthur Crow © 2012
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Art, your opening line may be the best. Soul dark eyes bleeding obsidian. This is truly a keen image. Fever of liquid shadows. The whole poem bears the mark of an attentive writer, and a poet of unique skill. I rarely read lines like this in postmodernist literature here. You could set the example, if enough writers read this.
A myriad of talons, primeval necromancy lust untamed. Thrilling metaphors. The quotation in italics was great. You show good imagination. I hope that you will continue writing in this is outstanding style and worthy of notice. I find almost nothing to complain here.
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LaColombeDeDeuil Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2014  Professional General Artist

~~Absolutely spot on with the imagery, you take me there in words and leave me behind to lie forever immersed in the dark beauty of it all. ~~

BruiseViolet01 Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2014
This is absolutely beautiful.
ArthurCrow Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Professional Writer
Thank you
Clouded-Rachel Featured By Owner May 26, 2013  Student Writer
This is gorgeous. Your imagery is absolutely stunning. Well done.
ArthurCrow Featured By Owner May 28, 2013  Professional Writer
Hey thanks so much, that's a wonderful response
Clouded-Rachel Featured By Owner May 28, 2013  Student Writer
You're welcome!
imaginative-lioness Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I have featured this piece in my journal: [link]
ArthurCrow Featured By Owner May 14, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank you so much, really appreciate it
Michel-le-fou Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2013  Professional Writer
Art, i will criticise after a moment. I liked the opening of this poem.
asecretoutlet Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012
I have a list of favorite words, and you used four of them in this. (shadow, whisper, gossamer, shimmer) and I think I'm going to add obsidian.

We have a very similar taste in words; the only difference is that you have the ability to coherently incorporate them into your writing (consciously, unconsciously, however you do it XD) I'm totes jelly. It's beautiful :)
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